Thursday, July 2, 2015

ANT FARM

ANT FARM


I've visited the ant farm, even spray-painted my initials on the 63' Sedan. Dad loved his baby-blue caddy, a testament to his success. I remember racing it down the road and choking on the dust cloud swirling like a comet tale as he drove away.



Memories of him tinkering, washing, and polishing Abby, a car named after me, are all I have, that and a few faded photographs. Dad was handsome; the ladies loved him. I wonder if he loved anyone.

Mom married Hank, a mean son-of-a-bitch.

Stuffing Hank's carcass in the tail of that monument somehow seems apropos.

99 words
Yolanda Renee © 2015



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Friday Fictioneers is hosted by Rochelle Wisoff Fields. She's provided the following PHOTO PROMPT via © Jean L. Hays.

All we have to do is write in a hundred words or less where this prompt has taken us.  Can you do it? Will you do it? Why not? Tighten your storytelling, give it a try! 

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37 comments:

Anonymous said...

Relationships with step fathers are always a challenge.
(maybe "tail" in lieu of "tale"?)

Sandra Crook said...

That "I wonder if he loved anyone" has quite a plaintive ring to it. Nicely done.

Keith's Ramblings said...

Fathers - there's nothing like the real thing.

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Denise Covey said...

A sharp tale Yolanda. Poor ole Hank, eh? Nice voice. :-)

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

I like how it ended!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, even grammarly missed that one!

Yolanda Renée said...

Seemed important, thanks Sandra!

Yolanda Renée said...

Yup, got one of my own! :)

Yolanda Renée said...

Hi Denise, thanks!

Yolanda Renée said...

Me too, especially when I can still shock my hubby with them!

Deepa said...

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Tara Tyler said...

love your flash fiction! i used to do a weekly drabble but my friend stopped posting her prompts. things change

and as for your iwsg - sounds like you're doing awesome! and what a great quote! that's sorta how i write, with an outline that needs foundation, ever adding to the foundation!
happy july!

Sally said...

Great ending.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Dee Dee, proudly displaying my award! Feeling awesome!

Yolanda Renée said...

Happy July Tara, thanks, that means a lot! Yes, always adding to the foundation!

Unknown said...

Best place for him!

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Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Sally, I actually wrote a pretty soft piece, but quickly changed my mind. Didn't sound like me at all. :)

Pat Hatt said...

Justice is done. Now just don't get caught haha

Yolanda Renée said...

I thought so, thanks Rosey!

Yolanda Renée said...

Ah, I'm good, no problem there! :)

draliman said...

Great story of memories, and then that wonderful twist at the end. Loved it!

Vinay Leo R. said...

Hank ain't so lucky. Then again, he never had a chance to replace the real dad :)

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Russell said...

I just love happy endings when the bad guy gets what he deserves. That was a great line about dad," I wonder if he loved anyone."

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Alistair, means a lot coming from you!

Yolanda Renée said...

Don't know if that's true, I've know many a great stepdad! But it is a hard row to hoe!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Russell, I liked it too!

Julie Flanders said...

I so love your flash stories. This ending was perfect. :D

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Julie, I have fun writing it!

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields said...

Dear Yolanda Renee,

Poignant story. I think Abbey will always have problems with father figures.

Shalom,

Rochelle

Yolanda Renée said...

Some fathers, and some mothers aren't perfect. Thanks Rochelle, great prompt!

Anonymous said...

i hope stepdad feels comfortable in his new dig. :)

TBM said...

Ah, justice in a way.

brudberg said...

Very apt ending for that bad man Hank... love the twist in the end.

Priceless Joy said...

I really enjoyed your story! Loved the ending!

margirene said...

I love the contrast between the two father figures in her life - Dad's not perfect, it seerms, but you can feel the love she has for him. Great ending. No point wasting time or words on Hank. Well told.

Gah Learner said...

That was a surprise twist. Great story.

David Ronaldo said...

This farm looks great.
leaf cutter ants