This is a Friday Fictioneers Flash
Fiction Challenge. Hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields and all based off a photo. This weeks prompt is provided by and copyright
to G. L. MacMillan.
Rochelle requires participants, in
100 words or less write about the picture provided. You can read this week’s
stories by clicking on the Blue
Links and the blue frog on Rochelle's page.
© G. L.
MacMillan
Moonlight Ballet
The light that filtered through the hundreds of colorful bottles
in my uncle's house created unusual ballets on the dull surfaces.
Sometimes I could swear I heard whispers.
The purple bottle intrigued me the most. One moonlit night I spied
a dancing beam. Against orders, I touched the bottle. An electrical charge shot
through me and light filled the room.
Instantaneously my missing parents stood before me.
My uncle thundered into the room, his demonic form revealed.
Safely cocooned in my parent's luminosity, I saw a ray of fire
emanating from the remaining bottles hold him spellbound until
he disintegrated.
100 words
Yolanda Renee © 2015
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23 comments:
Beautiful photo. :-)
And I love the way you used it.
The uncle got his due in the end
"unusual ballets on the dull surfaces." I love that!
"unusual ballets on the dull surfaces." I love that!
Wonderful imaginative story! I loved the way you worded your sentences and the fact that the devil uncle got his due reward.
I love that you did this so well, and only 150 words.
Positively demonic. Very evocative too.
Thanks Misha, appreciate your visit and comment!
He'd collected and surrounded himself with too much goodness for his own good! :)
Thanks Chrys, that how I saw the light dancing.
Devil always gets his reward - goodness conquers evil in my books every time. Thanks Joy!
It took about five re-writes to get it to flow, and I think it still might be a bit choppy, but that's the challenge. Thanks Ivy!
Souls in a bottle, or hundreds of souls in bottles, just what a nasty demon would do. Thanks Jo!
LOL, I just realized the word count I had listed was wrong at 150 - totally missed that, now changed to the proper and accurate count of 100 - thanks to you. Believe me if I'd had that extra fifty words this might have been a masterpiece. :) ha, ha, still laughing! Thanks for catching that!
Quite a touching story what with being saved by the parents, even though there's a demon involved! I wonder if the parents were trapped by demon uncle, or if they entombed themselves on purpose to save the child in case the uncle got "out of hand"?
Great story!
Wow. It's amazing how powerful a story you can tell in so few words Yolanda. You have real talent.
Your imagination knows no bounds, girl. Great job! (I'll never again look at shelves filled with dusty antique bottles quite the same...)
Happy weekend!
For the daughter they were missing, but yes, the uncle had trapped them. Thanks Alistair.
Thanks Maurice, i'm not sure if it's a talent or I'm too lazy to write a longer piece. :)
Hey Susan, told you I'd move you to the top. I actually collect those dusty antique bottles, cobalt blue!
Dear Yolanda Renee,
That's one way to get rid of a troublesome uncle. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
intense with a magnificent ending! sweet!
Wow, this is great, an exciting story, beginning to end.
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