Thursday, July 23, 2015

FIRST DATE


Friday Fictioneers is a weekly 100 word flash fiction challenge hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. The following photo is this weeks PHOTO PROMPT, a cool picture for hot days, depending on your side of the globe. Rochelle asks where does it take you? Tell us in a hundred words or less.


FIRST DATE

Chocolate World's winter holiday display of lights, hot cocoa and fresh kettle corn, was a date that rivaled all previous first dates. I never felt the cold, not with my hand in yours, or your arms holding me close during the monorail ride.

Then, before the date ended and with a crowd around us, you got down on one knee and pulled out an engagement ring.

I shook my head, tried to stop the madness, but you persisted.

I whispered, "No! Not on our first date," and pleaded for understanding, right before your knife pierced my heart. 


97 words
Yolanda Renée © 2015

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17 comments:

  1. Yikes! Everything was peaceful and chocolatey. What can go wrong?

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  2. Oh dear, not the romantic ending I was expecting.

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  3. I hope she got some chocolate before it happened!

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  4. You totally had me lulled there Yolanda, then kapow! A knife to the heart! Yikes! :-)

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  5. Guess he wasn't good at taking no for an answer.

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  6. Proposing on a first date could be really romantic or stalkerish. LOL Great flash fiction Yolanda

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  7. Nice twist. Must have been a cyber stalker :)

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  8. So intense! That changed mood fast.

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  9. That was some twist at the end.

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  10. Dear Yolanda,

    Now that's a chilling first date.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  11. Some folk don't take rejection well.
    Scary piece.

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  12. A frightening first date! Why do I now want some chocolate... ;) Have a great weekend!

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  13. Yikes, great twist! What an obsessive lover he is.

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  14. wow, that went south so fast!
    but i totally see it as the beginning of a serial killer murder mystery! love it!
    and it was such a lovely opening! i was wishing someone wouldve taken me on a first date like that, until the end! ah!

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  15. A deadly date. I like the flow of imagination here

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