DAY "17th thru the 20th"
OF THE HAUNTING
PREMONITION
Gray clouds and, occasionally, a mysterious gust of
wind would stir the frozen snowflakes into weird dances that haunted Sarah
daily. No sun, no birdsong, just the occasional crack and shattering of an icicle falling from a great height and the unusual gurgle of air escaping from
the lake were the only sounds that filled her days.
Sarah did her best to chase the blues away. Singing
her favorite songs, Sarah serenaded the ice-filled gorge for her peace of mind
and the echoing accompaniment. Sitting atop the rock in her favorite fishing
spot, she sang as she fished for the fresh dinner she'd planned for Chet's
return. He said he'd be back in a week, if not sooner, either with the rescuers
or just to return to her because the mountain was still socked in.
Sarah hadn't heard the sound of one plane or chopper
the entire week, even though she'd spent hours listening. Meditating, praying, and
visualizing, to no avail. She had not been able to manifest anything positive, but still,
she held on to hope.
She stared over the lake, wondering about Chet's location when she heard his voice.
"Sarah, you really need to be more careful. Pay attention. Be prepared, he's coming."
Out of the corner of
her eye, she saw Chet approaching and turned to greet him, but a sudden yank on
her fishing pole had her jerking her attention back to the lake. The rod went
flying. She grabbed for it but lost her balance and slid off the rock straight
down onto the ice. Chet's
makeshift cast on her broken ankle gave way, but so did the ice. Sarah slipped
through and into the cold wetness. The pain surging through her body was
nothing compared to the intense shock of the water as it consumed her.
Photo by Greg Nerantzakis on Unsplash
She fought with all she had to get back to the
surface. But murkiness, tangled reeds, heavy clothes, and a heavier parka
weighed her down. Her lungs felt like they'd explode before she would recognize
which way was up. But she let go of a lung full of air and watched the bubbles
ascend. She kicked off the rocky bottom with her good leg, and with her parka
half on and half off, she broke through to the surface. Grappling to find a
handhold on the ice and laboring not to be pulled back into the icy water by
the heavy parka. She took a deep breath and yelled for Chet. But he was nowhere
to be seen. Maybe he'd gone for some rope. Calming herself, she removed the
water-soaked coat and threw it toward the rocks sticking above the ice on shore
that were out of her reach. After three throws, she managed to secure the hood
of her parka over a large stone. Sarah pulled herself from the lake and across
the rock-filled icy shore.
Breathless and unable to find her crutches, she crawled
back to the cave. She knew how deadly hyperthermia was, and her only goal was
to get to safety and warmth. But as she dragged her broken foot along the
ground, the rest of the splint, mostly gauze, sluffed off. But a section became
caught on a stone. She stopped to tear the rest of the makeshift cast off,
which left her leg unprotected and made her movements even more painful. She
took a moment to catch her breath, pray, and look around. Where the hell was
Chet? She knew she'd seen him. She knew she heard his voice.
But a deep silence covered the area. No wind, not even
a rustle. The pain in her leg was becoming worse. Even more than she remembered
of the initial break. She laid her broken leg across her good leg. Just as a
chill wind blew a swirl of snow like a dust devil at her. The clouds darkened, and
lightning and thunder shook the gorge. Giant icicles by the dozens crashed
to the ground, and blowing snow twirled and blew in all directions.
Darkness had fallen so quickly that it was as though
someone had turned the lights out or closed the curtains. Sarah shivered and
thought her bones would snap from the instant brittleness caused by the Arctic
chill. Then her entire body began shaking uncontrollably. Her extremities
burned as though they were on fire, and then they grew numb almost
simultaneously. She gathered her strength and pulled herself backward with her
hands and arms. She let her good leg protect and haul the broken one.
Eventually, she made it to the entrance of the cavern.
Photo by Chris Ensminger on Unsplash
She looked up. Atop the cliff was a gray-black wolf,
his vicious fang-filled grin intimated at the terror he couldn't wait to
inflict.
That's when she realized that Chet wasn't coming
back.
He'd warned her.
It was Chet's last heroic deed.
***
842 words
Yolanda Renee © 2023
Tagline: Pay attention to your sixth
sense.
This is another excerpt from the 7th book of my
Alaskan Series, Murder on Mount Fairweather, coming out December 2023.
READ THE OTHER ENTRIES HERE
17 comments:
Oh my. Oh my, oh my, oh my. And was his last good deed in time...
This was a riveting read. I was on the edge of my seat the whole time. I can't wait to read Murder on Mount Fairweather.
My heart is pounding!! Yikes!
Hi,
You have convinced me. I want to read the book. That it is also an excellent image of the wolf. I see he's really deadly. Now I wonder what is going to happen to her.
Very descriptive and well written.
Have a lovely rest of October and take care.
Shalom shalom
What a beautiful excerpt! Sign me up. I'm ready the read that new book coming out. The intensity only grows as Sarah realizes how vulnerable she is, the weather worsens -- and then the wolf appears. Only one suggestion: that spelling of icicles. Have a truly wonderful rest of October. This story suggests you're already ready for November.
Oh God, no, no.. not his last heroic deed. I hope not. You pulled me instantly with Sarah's fall. That was so powerfully done. These are great sneak peeks, Renee. Very gripping.
EC - I can't ruin the story. :)
Kalpana - Thank you, I can't wait to finish it.
Jemi - Thanks!
Pat - Thank you! I was lucky to find it. Unsplash is fabulous. Happy October to you too!
Beth - Thank you for pointing that out. Just goes to show Grammarly isn't the end-all to end-all when grammar or editing. LOL I'm getting there slowly but surely!
Sonia - Can't spill the beans. Thanks for your kind words!
Hi Yolanda - this is brilliant - I felt frozen and horrified at her state - and then Chet ... no, no, no ... congratulations - cheers Hilary
A gripping tale of the danger and power, love has over a person. Well done, Yolanda.
Oh this is so sad. I'm glad Sarah survived (or will she?) but so sad that Chet didn't, or so it appears. Thanks for this chilling (in more ways than one) story to celebrate spooky October!
Sarah's fall into the chilling water gave me goosebumps. But I was so happy when she survived. And just as I was hoping that Chet would be around, somewhere, the wolf came into the picture and my heart broke. :(
Such a riveting piece, Yolanda.
Absolutely gripping! And melancholy at the foreshadowing of Chet's death...your descriptions of the landscape are just marvellous - thank you for taking me places I'll never get to physically.
Sad, scary, and totally absorbing. Give me more!
Hilary, thank you. Appreciate your words!
Christopher, thank you!
Denise, thanks, appreciate your critique.
Shilpa, thank you so much!
Nila, thank you, your words mean a lot!
Olga, I hope to soon!
Oye! That didn't end well for Sarah or Chet. Chilling in many ways, Yolanda. Thanks for the October-perfect story.
What a terrible predicament to be in. Sometimes I'm glad I'm the sort of person who likes camping in a cabin with heat, running water, and electricity and fishing in a lake near said cabin.
Lee, thanks for the read. I loved writing it, especially for October.
Ornery Owl, I know what you mean. I've been caught out in the elements one to many times. Very dangerous.
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