For this flash fiction challenge, Barbara W Beacham has provided
a photo and the first sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the
story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Don’t forget to
use the opening sentence… This challenge runs from Monday to Sunday! Get
creative and have fun finishing the story!
Our thanks, today, goes to J.A. over at Living Author Society
for suggesting a topic for this week’s challenge.
Please include the photo with your bit of flash and a link
back to this post. Do not forget to click on the blue frog and add your link so
that others can enjoy your story too! Now have some fun!
HAUNTED
“Where did they go?”
You ask as you snap your haunting pictures of ruination. I see
vibrancy, families, children, and my love; he'd fought courageously, but was
overwhelmed by the sheer numbers. Father had sent me to the caves to gather the
healing herbs for my sick sister. The beasts attacked after I left, and I watched
from the hill above as the horde destroyed what had been my home.
My people believed the abode was invincible, but they'd died horrifically.
Brick by brick these monsters were relentless in their attack. Our simple
weapons took out a good number of them, but the beasts had more powerful armaments
of light and fire.
I heard the screams long after they went silent. Once the invaders
had wiped my tribe from existence and
moved on to the next settlement. I returned to prepare for the future. Vengeance
will be mine.
Please come in, rest a while.
150 words
Yolanda Renee © 2015
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25 comments:
Very creative! I wouldn't have come up with beasts attacking.
The invaders better watch their back
I'm sure vengeance will be exacted - great story
Feel sorry for the character watching the destruction of her home.
Feel sorry for the character watching the destruction of her home.
Excellent story Yolanda! I loved it.
It always makes me sad when I think about all the Native Americans who were killed. This was a great (but sad) story about vengeance.
Great slant on this story. A very interesting read. Thank You!
Yolanda, that was fantastic! I loved reading it. That last sentence was awesome. Your use of beasts was so good. You rocked it.
Yolanda, that was fantastic! I loved reading it. That last sentence was awesome. Your use of beasts was so good. You rocked it.
Hi Alex, thanks, I tried to view the scene from her perspective.
She's one determined lady, they better!
Thanks Sally, in some way, yes.
Me too, a horrible scene to witness.
Thanks Joy!
Me too Chrys, but it doesn't end, does it? Will it ever?
Thanks Graham, appreciate you stopping by.
Thanks Robyn, appreciate the read and especially the comment. I have a tendency to go where the prompt takes me.
twisty scary goodness! nice job!
Revenge served ...
Wonderfully written and chilling.
This is a chilling tale! I wonder how he got his revenge.... Thanks for writing again for the MFtS challenge and be well... ^..^
Very dark. I hope she gets her revenge,
I like your description of the killers as "beasts" - they were in a way, with their "fire sticks" and thirst for invasion and murder.
Those ruins certainly set the scene. Your tale of killer beasts and decimation is gripping, Yolanda.
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