Monday, August 13, 2018

WEP - CHANGE OF HEART



WHEN LOVE DIES

it’s sudden

earth shattering

soul-sickening

mind-numbing


when love dies

it’s unrepairable

ashes scattered on hurricane winds

never to be whole again


when love dies

light is diminished

color dull

and music, one melancholy note


when love dies

the soul is scarred

life becomes questionable

the future non-existent



when love dies

the heart weakens

trust shatters

but hope eventually fills the void.

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Yolanda Renee © 2018

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49 comments:

Elephant's Child said...

Love this.
And am so grateful that there is room in our hearts for hope.

Susan Flett Swiderski said...

WOW! This is the first I've seen of your poetic side, and it is reeeeeeally good.

Here's to hope!

Pat Hatt said...

That little bit of hope can help open the void. Can fill it if the right hope is found.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

That was powerful!

desk49 said...

Dan good if I do say so myself.
"but hope eventually fills the void." Gret ending line.
Supper Job
Until the heart so scarred from each love's death it to dies.

Denise Covey said...

Wow, Renee, strong stuff indeed! Loved it! Every shattering line. Love the refrain - 'when love dies.' More poetry from you, please! (This is what you were intended to post, not those other ideas you had!.)

Pat Garcia said...

Your poem speaks to the hearts of those who are going through a terrible separation either by divorce or death of their loved on. It touches the pain that they experienced.
Shalom aleichem,
Pat G

Hilary Melton-Butcher said...

Hi Yolanda - that is brilliant ... so well done - short, succinct ... yet full of hope after the heart has broken. So well said ... loved it ... love lost is so heart shattering ... cheers Hilary

Yolanda Renée said...

You're too sweet! Thank you!

Yolanda Renée said...

So true, Pat. So true!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thank you, Alex!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Ellis, that means a lot coming from you!

Yolanda Renée said...

LOL, surprised me, I will say that. So few words to say what I really wanted to say in my stories, but couldn't - not successfully! Thanks, Denise!

Yolanda Renée said...

The pain when love dies is unimaginable, almost indescribable. Thanks, Pat!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thank you Hilary, it was a journey to get here, but it seems to have worked.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Sue, but for some there is no coming back from a broken heart.

Laura Clipson said...

I love this, it starts off so dark, with a glimmer of hope at the end (much like when love does die, so you've captured it perfectly!)

Toi Thomas said...

A concise piece on the durability of the human heart. Brilliant poem.

Sandi said...

Hope wins...

Nilanjana Bose said...

So glad there's hope for a broken heart. Lovely poem. Loved the lines colour dull/and music one melancholy note...so true!

Deborah Drucker said...

'Ashes scattered on hurricane winds' definitely not able to bring back together. The poem conveys well the loss of hope and depression,sudden and caught unaware, but ends on a hopeful note of the resilient human spirit.

Olga Godim said...

"... hope eventually fills the void." - Yes! Hope is the savior of life. Without hope, we exist, not live.

Elizabeth said...

As others have already stated, I like how it ends with hope. Hope carries us through the darkest of times.

Deniz Bevan said...

Aww, that's a sad one, but I do love that it ends with a hopeful line!

Diane Burton said...

This is so powerful. Like others, I've never seen the poetic side of you (from IWSG). Your piece is poignant, heartbreaking, so emotional. I admire your ability to convey so much in this form.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Laura!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Toi!

Yolanda Renée said...

As it should! Hi, Sandi.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Nila. Your comment means the world!

Yolanda Renée said...

Hi, Deborah, we've all survived a broken heart, but I think some are harder than others to move on from.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Olga, so true!

Yolanda Renée said...

Yes it does, Elizabeth, thanks for stopping in!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Deniz. It's a rough journey.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Diane. I dabble, although it's always been my favorite form or expression. My grandmother wrote poetry and I made the attempt because of her.

Rebecca M. Douglass said...

That's a powerful poem, and I think it expresses the feeling well. I haven't done anything with poetry for years, but you remind me that it's a good discipline, expressing the ideas and feelings in a spare kind of language.

Tanya Miranda said...

The short but succinct lines sound angry, regretful, and hopeful at the same time. I love the style. I can almost hear it being spoken.

D.G. Hudson said...

Hope does start the healing, but some never get that far. Some get angry, some get revenge, and some feel lost. Well done and I don't think I've read your poetry before either. A nice surprise.

Kalpana said...

I found you on your wordpress blog Yolanda. It's a very powerful poem, aptly expressing all those hard feelings. Glad you end with hope.

Unknown said...

A melancholic poem about the loss of love, with hope that it will find you again.

L.G. Keltner said...

Great poem with captivating imagery! It's sad and powerful, and I love that it ended on a note of hope. Well done!

Michelle Wallace said...

I love your poem!
My favourite imagery is the comparison to a monotonous sound... that never-ending sense of sameness... very effective.
Thanks for providing a glimmer of hope at the end. It makes me think of Alexander Pope's line: "Hope springs eternal in the human breast..." as it should!
Hope you are well, Yolanda!

Shannon Lawrence said...

Heart breaking and impactful. Gorgeous poetry.

Roland Clarke said...

Moving and powerful. Triggers both tears and nods as I remember what love has done...

J Lenni Dorner said...

Excellent poem.
I really love the image you selected. The wine breaking the glass like that? Amazing picture! And it goes so well with your words. Bravo!

Operation Awesome said...

Love and hope are so intrinsically linked, one cannot exist without the other, yet both can cause such pain. Good work on capturing this so succinctly.

Christine Rains said...

Marvelously done. :)

Sally said...

Great words that I could relate to.

Nas said...

Yes, great words.

Unknown said...

Great Post!!

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