Thursday, August 6, 2015

THE ILLUSION

This is a FridayFictioneers Flash Fiction Challenge. Hosted by RochelleWisoff-Fields  and all based off a photo. This weeks prompt is provided by and copyright to Madison Woods.

Rochelle requires participants, in 100 words or less write about the picture provided. You can read this week’s stories by clicking on the BlueLinks and the blue frog on Rochelle's page.




THE ILLUSION

I ran. Deep in the woods, the darkness enveloped me like a thick soup. I felt invisible, cloaked, and safe. I doubted you knew I was gone. You'd killed me.
The going was slow, but speed wasn't important. I imagined myself with the hunting abilities of the cat, stealthy and silent.
At the creek, I cleaned off the blood, tore my dress, and created bandages. Then I covered myself with mud. I would disappear entirely.
Then the clouds parted. A ray of moonlight lit the path. I heard you laugh and knew the safety of the darkness was an illusion.

100 words
Yolanda Renee © 2015

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34 comments:

  1. Scary tale. Good ending line. It leaves readers to imagine their own ending. Nicely done.

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    1. Thanks ansumani, I hope it does, but I'm like a lot of the others, I want more too! LOL

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  2. All that work and still caught

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    1. Almost, maybe, not quite, don't know didn't finish it. LOL Hey Pat!

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  3. Agh, you can't stop there... great suspense.

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    1. But I have to, only allowed 100 words! Thanks Ga H!

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  4. Now that's chilling. Especially the part about making bandages from her dress. The idea of covering yourself in mud for camouflage is an old survival trick, and it can still work in full moonlight if she uses surrounding plants to obscure her outline. It sounds like that guy's going to catch her anyway though.

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    1. Hey Maurice, you never know, maybe he should have kept his mouth shut. :)

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  5. It's hard to have a murder without a body. She needs to find a club and knock the laughter right out of his mouth. Great tale of suspense.

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  6. Hey Yolanda,

    No, you are not imagining this! This comment is real. The moonlight peeking back out from the clouds and so much for a temporary illusion.

    Excellent, Yolanda.

    Gary :)

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    1. Hi Gary, no illusion, you were here! :)

      Thanks Gary!

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  7. Nicely done. A ray of hope and then it is chillingly squashed!

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    1. Sometimes things don't end well. You know that Christine. :)

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  8. That photo is so atmospheric, it should be on a book cover. And you really did it justice, girl. Very chilling. But jeez! You stomped on her hopes as if they were a nasty ol' nest of spiders. :)

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    1. Love the analogy, spiders, huh. LOL
      Thank Susan!

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  9. Yikes! The twist at the end was awesomely creepy! I'm loving what you do with these little 100 word stories. I used to do flash fic competitions with 300 word limits, but I can't image being limited to 100 and doing as well as you. Have a great weekend! :)

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    1. Could have used an extra 200 for sure. LOL Thanks Lexa!

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  10. This is a terrific, suspenseful snippet. Hard to do with such an austere word limit. Kudos!

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    1. Hard is what makes it such a wonderful challenge. Thanks Debbie!

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    1. Not for her it wasn't. LOL Hey Squid, thanks for stopping by!

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  12. Yolanda, your stories are chilling and thrilling as Edgar Allan Poe would say. You'll have no trouble writing for the Halloween WEP challenge. Great use of the picture. :-)

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    1. I hope not Denise, knock on wood. Thanks for the confidence.

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  13. Dear Yolanda,

    Apparently he didn't kill her. I hope she can keep ahead of him.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. I hope so too, but she's got to be quick and careful.

      Thanks Rochelle, hope you are feeling better!

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  14. Great build-up of the illusion of safety in the darkness, only to be broken by the moonlight and that chilling laugh. Very good!

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  15. Very scary. Such an effort to escape, and at the last minute she's done for. Great twist.

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