Great Loss
The sand held hints of the lives lost, strands of wire, coins, and jewels buried deep. Treasure hunters with metal detectors crisscrossed the beach. Devoid of its former glory. Only the palms stood tall. The resort was gone, and its entire population too.
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100 words
Yolanda
Renée © 2021
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Thank you for reading my short flash submission for WEP's Great Wave Challenge.
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52 comments:
Oh boy, you pack a mighty punch in few words. Here's to all the Mums and Dads, families, who've been buried in great waves over time. :-(
Thank you. As Denise says, there is one powerful punch here.
Sad and sudden. Enjoyed.
Amazing how much you can say in 100 words. Hard hitting, like the wave I think. You're a born story teller.
I really enjoyed this. It's amazing on how much you told in so few words. Thanks for sharing it.
A heart punch! Well done
Fabulously compact as as others are pointing out, your 100 words deliver a keen punch. Left me hungry for more of the stories that were washed away by the great wave.
Oh, no! Brief and impactful - a tragic story of nature rebelling against us. Nobody stands a chance against such great waves.
Wow! You hit me right in the heart. You've told the story of so many people in so few words. Amazing piece of writing. Thanks for such a great read.
Hi Yolanda
So sad. And also shocking for those who learn of it after the fact. Short, sweet and well written.
Nancy
It's amazing how you packed such heartache into so few words. Nature can be astonishing in its power.
Yikes! That hits right in the retirement account! Although, if I had to choose a way to go, a beach vacation is not the worst possibility. I have a strange inner hate for those treasure hunters, though.
Waves come in many forms, as I'm learning during this challenge. Amazing entries! Starting with yours!
Thanks, Sue. I do hope you are feeling better. It's wonderful to see you visiting again!
Thank you!
Ouch. Tragedy in just a few short words.
I do love the challenge of 100 words as much as 1000 words. Thanks!
Thanks, Natalie, and thanks for reading!
Thanks, Jemi!
Thanks, Pennie! Your words are most appreciated!
No, we don't. Very scary. Nature has a way for destruction! But so does man!
Thank you Lenny, and welcome to the WEP!
Thanks, Nancy! I cheated and used an old flash. Trying to finish two books, so little time for new material. Shh...don't tell!
So true! Thanks, Laura.
LOL, me too! And yes, it describes my retirement to a T! LOL
Doesn't take much. Thanks, Rebecca!
That was like a gut punch! Tragedy on an epic scale in just 100 words - kudos!
Hi Yolanda - yes ... so true - life has its moments ... I am so glad I haven't experienced a tsunami ... excellent, frightening flash - yet true fiction.
Good luck with finishing off the two books ... cheers Hilary
Hi,
Very sad. At the crossroad of a new beginning that ends quickly with a Tsunami.
Shalom aleichem
Wow!
Dark and sad! Nature can be so merciless!
- C J Austin
Hi Renee!
Like the others say... WOW. SO much in so few words. I really loved the first paragraph!
Short but strong. Like some people I know :) Good work.
I also thought "tsunami." Nice job
My my! This thought often crosses my mind. Though in a different context. My husband has a transferable job. So we keep planning for when he shall retire. But there are unforseen circumstances always. I tell him today is the day. Loved your take.
Thanks, Sonia: We're semi-retired and while the threat is always there, that view is magnificent!
I tried to come up with something different, but I live on the coast, so it just went there. LOL
LOL, Thanks, Jemima!
Sooo merciless! And the season is upon us. Thanks, C J!
But still a journey...
thanks, Pat!
Thanks, Nila!
I took the easy way out! :)
Today was release day for one of the books. So why do I feel it's still unfinished?
LOL
Thanks, Hilary!
I have known people who suffered loss from such a wave. Powerful! Thank you
A hard-hitting drabble embodying the truism "you don't get what you deserve, you get what you get." I appreciate how much power you packed into just 100 words.
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Great job, Yolanda! Only 100 words, but so much there. “ Devoid of its former glory. Only the palms stood tall.“ - such a sadness in these words.
Carpe diem - a 100 words to say it all- but you did it.
Thank you, Jackie!
Thanks, Ornery! Appreciate the shout out and all the work you've gone too. Above and Beyond!
I love the limitations of 100 words. One of my favorite challenges!
Thank you!
Thanks, Michael! I appreciate your kind words!
Short and painfully sweet! Loved your first line:The sand held hints of the lives lost, strands of wire, coins, and jewels buried deep.
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