Wednesday, June 16, 2021

WEP - Great Wave


Great Loss

         

The sand held hints of the lives lost, strands of wire, coins, and jewels buried deep. Treasure hunters with metal detectors crisscrossed the beach. Devoid of its former glory. Only the palms stood tall. The resort was gone, and its entire population too.        

A breezy summer morning determined to be a blistering sweltering day had turned apocalyptic. A rogue wave forty stories high hit the coast. And, in the blink of an eye, everything disappeared. Mom and Dad had planned their retirement for years but barely had the chance to enjoy the fruits of their labor before nature heartlessly rebelled.

   Photo by Darice de Cuba on Unsplash


100 words

Yolanda Renée © 2021

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Thank you for reading my short flash submission for WEP's Great Wave Challenge. 

I hope you'll follow the links below to read more entries from a group of talented artists who've interpreted this monumental work of art in more magical and brilliant ways.


52 comments:

Denise Covey said...

Oh boy, you pack a mighty punch in few words. Here's to all the Mums and Dads, families, who've been buried in great waves over time. :-(

Elephant's Child said...

Thank you. As Denise says, there is one powerful punch here.

Sanhita Mukherjee said...

Sad and sudden. Enjoyed.

Kalpana said...

Amazing how much you can say in 100 words. Hard hitting, like the wave I think. You're a born story teller.

Natalie Aguirre said...

I really enjoyed this. It's amazing on how much you told in so few words. Thanks for sharing it.

Jemi Fraser said...

A heart punch! Well done

Pennie Nichols said...

Fabulously compact as as others are pointing out, your 100 words deliver a keen punch. Left me hungry for more of the stories that were washed away by the great wave.

Olga Godim said...

Oh, no! Brief and impactful - a tragic story of nature rebelling against us. Nobody stands a chance against such great waves.

Lenny Lee said...

Wow! You hit me right in the heart. You've told the story of so many people in so few words. Amazing piece of writing. Thanks for such a great read.

N. R. Williams said...

Hi Yolanda
So sad. And also shocking for those who learn of it after the fact. Short, sweet and well written.
Nancy

L.G. Keltner said...

It's amazing how you packed such heartache into so few words. Nature can be astonishing in its power.

Steph W. said...

Yikes! That hits right in the retirement account! Although, if I had to choose a way to go, a beach vacation is not the worst possibility. I have a strange inner hate for those treasure hunters, though.

Yolanda Renée said...

Waves come in many forms, as I'm learning during this challenge. Amazing entries! Starting with yours!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Sue. I do hope you are feeling better. It's wonderful to see you visiting again!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thank you!

Rebecca M. Douglass said...

Ouch. Tragedy in just a few short words.

Yolanda Renée said...

I do love the challenge of 100 words as much as 1000 words. Thanks!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Natalie, and thanks for reading!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Jemi!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Pennie! Your words are most appreciated!

Yolanda Renée said...

No, we don't. Very scary. Nature has a way for destruction! But so does man!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thank you Lenny, and welcome to the WEP!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Nancy! I cheated and used an old flash. Trying to finish two books, so little time for new material. Shh...don't tell!

Yolanda Renée said...

So true! Thanks, Laura.

Yolanda Renée said...

LOL, me too! And yes, it describes my retirement to a T! LOL

Yolanda Renée said...

Doesn't take much. Thanks, Rebecca!

Nilanjana Bose said...

That was like a gut punch! Tragedy on an epic scale in just 100 words - kudos!

Hilary Melton-Butcher said...

Hi Yolanda - yes ... so true - life has its moments ... I am so glad I haven't experienced a tsunami ... excellent, frightening flash - yet true fiction.
Good luck with finishing off the two books ... cheers Hilary

Pat Garcia said...

Hi,
Very sad. At the crossroad of a new beginning that ends quickly with a Tsunami.
Shalom aleichem

Sally said...

Wow!

Unknown said...

Dark and sad! Nature can be so merciless!
- C J Austin

Michael Di Gesu said...

Hi Renee!

Like the others say... WOW. SO much in so few words. I really loved the first paragraph!

Jemima Pett said...

Short but strong. Like some people I know :) Good work.

Edix said...

I also thought "tsunami." Nice job

Sonia Dogra said...

My my! This thought often crosses my mind. Though in a different context. My husband has a transferable job. So we keep planning for when he shall retire. But there are unforseen circumstances always. I tell him today is the day. Loved your take.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Sonia: We're semi-retired and while the threat is always there, that view is magnificent!

Yolanda Renée said...

I tried to come up with something different, but I live on the coast, so it just went there. LOL

Yolanda Renée said...

LOL, Thanks, Jemima!

Yolanda Renée said...

Sooo merciless! And the season is upon us. Thanks, C J!

Yolanda Renée said...

But still a journey...
thanks, Pat!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Nila!
I took the easy way out! :)

Yolanda Renée said...

Today was release day for one of the books. So why do I feel it's still unfinished?
LOL
Thanks, Hilary!

jackiebegue said...

I have known people who suffered loss from such a wave. Powerful! Thank you

Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost said...

A hard-hitting drabble embodying the truism "you don't get what you deserve, you get what you get." I appreciate how much power you packed into just 100 words.
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Carole Stolz said...

Great job, Yolanda! Only 100 words, but so much there. “ Devoid of its former glory. Only the palms stood tall.“ - such a sadness in these words.

Charlotte (MotherOwl) said...

Carpe diem - a 100 words to say it all- but you did it.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thank you, Jackie!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Ornery! Appreciate the shout out and all the work you've gone too. Above and Beyond!

Yolanda Renée said...

I love the limitations of 100 words. One of my favorite challenges!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thank you!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks, Michael! I appreciate your kind words!

cleemckenzie said...

Short and painfully sweet! Loved your first line:The sand held hints of the lives lost, strands of wire, coins, and jewels buried deep.