Tuesday, January 19, 2016

DOPPELGANGER


Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner is a weekly writing challenge designed for both the flash fiction newbie and the more experienced writer. It is the desire of this challenge to allow writers the opportunity to clear the cobwebs from a more tedious and involved project. Becoming a part of a new and growing writer’s community might be just what the doctor ordered to rejuvenate your writing juices

The opening sentence for the January 15th Flash Fiction for the Purposeful Practitioner:  ” We were within a mile-and-a-half of the service roads when we found it.”


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DOPPELGANGER

 "We were within a mile-and-a-half of the service roads when we found it."

The birds circling overhead caught our attention. We'd hoped to find the hikers before sunset. We never imagined anything like this.

Eviscerated bodies. The birds and larger animals had already consumed their eyes and carried off most of their organs.

Two young men who went out for a day's hike had met a monster.

We called the police and CSI. Lights lit the scene and a tarp protected the bodies while five men gathered evidence.

At midnight, howls of an animal stopped us cold. The beast attacked. Somehow, I survived.
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"Well doctor, is he sane enough to stand trial?"


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100 WORDS
Yolanda Renée © 2016




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27 comments:

  1. Gruesome story. Poor guys I hope they died fast. At least your main character survived. But how could he be responsible for such carnage. Unless, he was the beast himself? Great writing.

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    1. Thanks Amanda - I wanted it to be open for interpretation.

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  2. Ooh, intriguing end. Is he being blamed because no-one wants to believe in a monster, or is he indeed the monster? If so, maybe he doesn't even realise, he just wakes up sometimes in the woods covered in blood...
    Great story!

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    1. Hi Alistair, good question. I wonder what the answer is? :)

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  3. Crappy ending for the narrator. Unless as Amanda said, he's actually the beast.

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    1. Hi Alex, crappy ending is one way to put it. :)

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  4. Hmm sounds like he may be the nut case that is offing everyone.

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    1. Hi Pat, nut case is an understatement. :)

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  5. Oh that's good! I love monster stories like this where people are attacked and killed in the woods, etc. I think this could be a great concept for a longer story. :)

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    1. Hey Chrys:
      I used to see monsters in the woods when I was a child. Never wanted to be there alone! :)

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  6. That gave me the shivers! Great piece to accompany that image: cold and forbidding.

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  7. That gave me the shivers! Great piece to accompany that image: cold and forbidding.

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    1. Thanks Lee, it's the story the image inspired.

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  8. Deliciously creepy, as always. Reminds me of Cherie Reich's "Once Upon a Nightmare" collection of creepy stories set in some creepy woods. It'd fit right in. Great job, but I don't foresee a happy ending for the narrator.

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    1. Hi Susan,
      I read that one too. Cherie did a great job! Lot's of unanswered question in that story too. No happy ending in this one!

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  9. Lots of imagery to turn my stomach so early in the morning my friend. Now what sort of a monster is it, I'm thinking...and will the narrator survive long term? Hmmmmm...

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    1. Sorry Denise, good questions. I wonder too. :)

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  10. Very creepy in a good way...Great job!

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  11. Very creepy in a good way...Great job!

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  12. I remember an episode of the original CSI where they found some guy's body on a hillside, eaten up by wild animals and stuff. The imagery always set with me, but I could never think of anything to use it in.. this is great!

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    1. Hi Madilyn, one of my favorite shows, CSI - thanks, this picture did inspire me, in an odd way! :)

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  13. Hi Yolanda,

    Just here to catch up. Sorry to hear about life messing with your plans, I know you'll get them back on their feet soon. The flash was amazing-chilling as usual!
    Best always,
    Nila.

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    1. Hi Nila,
      Still dealing, still catching up - but moving forward. Thanks!

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  14. Is "he" the monster or the only survivor but has a story no one will believe? Enjoyed! Hope to see you next week.

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