HOSPITALITY
“Hey boys, how ’bout y’all makin’ yer Ma some
wind chimes?”
The words sounded authentic, the scene
before me, even more so. A small two story house the color of the sky with
white trim and a wraparound porch shouted welcome. The green trees and colorful
flowers said water was plentiful. I licked my dry, cracked lips with an equally
dry swollen tongue.
Each step up the wide expanse of hot red
clay mixed with sharp gravel was sheer torture on bare feet. Three days ago my
car broke down; I thought I could walk out, but the road changed and when I
attempted to go back to my car, I ended up on a path to nowhere.
The Matriarch sitting in the rocking chair
on the porch reminded me of my grandmother until she spoke.
"Lookie hyar,
fellas. Dinner's arrived, cuss it all t' tarnation. Come on now, put out th'
welcome platter, we'll hafta fatten her up fust."
149 Words
Yolanda Renee © 2015
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41 comments:
It is as though the Deliverance meets Wrong Turn.
Very creepy take on the sentence!
That was a bad place to break down near!
A really great scary creepy write ~ I love the finish ~ You have constructed a great character here Yolanda ~ Well done :)
Creepy indeed!!! I swear I felt like I was there while reading this... well done!!!!.
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Gosh I'm thirsty. Didn't take many words to create that atmosphere at all.
Eeek! Great job giving us the Matriarch's voice...creepy old bat that she is! :-)
Creepy. I can hear that accent.
Creepy good! Love the last bit! Thank you Yolanda for another contribution to the MFtS challenge. Be well... ^..^
The voice is magnificent Yolanda. Deliverance all right!
Cannibals and Deliverance rolled into one.
Creepy! Cannibals have to fatten the "calf." Hope she finds a way to escape. Loved the dialogue but couldn't figure out where it was from.
Y'all done gud wit dis 'un.
Nice job.
Funny thing is it didn't start out there at all! I was seriously thinking of my grandmother and a scene from my childhood. How hospitable she was and what fun we had going to her house. Somewhere I took a dark turn! :)
Indeed, Alex, indeed!
Thanks John, it did end up a bit creepy didn't it! :)
Thank you Debbie, that's quite a compliment!
Love the smaller word counts for flash fiction, but somehow when I have more words and a limit, I barely make it! :)
Hey Mina, thanks, so appreciated!
Thanks Sally, that means a lot!
You too Barb, sorry there was conflict around this prompt - so uncalled for. The memories it triggered for me brought me here. Why the dark turn, just because - surprises are always good!
An almost copy of actual family for that voice. Thank you!
Just a short story is all!
Haven't thought that far ahead, maybe I should as it was in first person! :)
Thank you tnkerr, your have the dialect down quite well!
Fun and freaky piece! But hey, while they fatten you up, you get more of a chance to get away, right?
Hopefully she can escape before she gets to fat to run.
Great write. Enjoyed this.
They're going to eat her? Eek! Cannibalism always freaks me out.
Thanks Shannon, that means a lot! Your reviews of horror make me want to follow all your suggestions, but I fear too many sleepless nights ahead. :)
Hey Diane, I have you to thank for a renewed sense of confidence! And yes, I'm thinking running is a good idea, but first a taste of those delicious looking cinnamon rolls! :)
Thanks yarnspinnerr - your work is magic!
Honestly Chrys, it does me too - it's why I hate Zombies! :)
Oh no!! Wrong turn- go back!!!
Ha, ha, it may be too late. Thanks Elizabeth!
Oh no! The MC definitely took a wrong turn somewhere.
That she did, Cherie, that she did. :(
LOL that's great. I can almost hear the banjos playing.
omg this is so creepy. Love it!
I love these flash fiction stories, so fun to read.
Oh crumbs, I hope she was joking :-( I love the sudden change from the welcoming home, a saviour after such a long walk in the blistering heat, and then Ma's rather sinister proclamation.
Path to nowhere indeed. It sounds like this bunch has gone mad as happers, completely bonkers. Well done, Yolanda. :) --- Suzanne
Great story, Yolanda! So creepy, but I can envision everything perfectly from your descriptions!
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