Thursday, August 6, 2015

THE ILLUSION

This is a FridayFictioneers Flash Fiction Challenge. Hosted by RochelleWisoff-Fields  and all based off a photo. This weeks prompt is provided by and copyright to Madison Woods.

Rochelle requires participants, in 100 words or less write about the picture provided. You can read this week’s stories by clicking on the BlueLinks and the blue frog on Rochelle's page.




THE ILLUSION

I ran. Deep in the woods, the darkness enveloped me like a thick soup. I felt invisible, cloaked, and safe. I doubted you knew I was gone. You'd killed me.
The going was slow, but speed wasn't important. I imagined myself with the hunting abilities of the cat, stealthy and silent.
At the creek, I cleaned off the blood, tore my dress, and created bandages. Then I covered myself with mud. I would disappear entirely.
Then the clouds parted. A ray of moonlight lit the path. I heard you laugh and knew the safety of the darkness was an illusion.

100 words
Yolanda Renee © 2015

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34 comments:

Anonymous said...

Scary tale. Good ending line. It leaves readers to imagine their own ending. Nicely done.

Pat Hatt said...

All that work and still caught

Gah Learner said...

Agh, you can't stop there... great suspense.

Anonymous said...

Truly scary. Well done.

Unknown said...

Frightening. Well done.

Maurice Mitchell said...

Now that's chilling. Especially the part about making bandages from her dress. The idea of covering yourself in mud for camouflage is an old survival trick, and it can still work in full moonlight if she uses surrounding plants to obscure her outline. It sounds like that guy's going to catch her anyway though.

Russell said...

It's hard to have a murder without a body. She needs to find a club and knock the laughter right out of his mouth. Great tale of suspense.

Priceless Joy said...

Excellent Yolanda!

klahanie said...

Hey Yolanda,

No, you are not imagining this! This comment is real. The moonlight peeking back out from the clouds and so much for a temporary illusion.

Excellent, Yolanda.

Gary :)

Christine Rains said...

Nicely done. A ray of hope and then it is chillingly squashed!

Susan Flett Swiderski said...

That photo is so atmospheric, it should be on a book cover. And you really did it justice, girl. Very chilling. But jeez! You stomped on her hopes as if they were a nasty ol' nest of spiders. :)

Yolanda Renée said...

Love the analogy, spiders, huh. LOL
Thank Susan!

Yolanda Renée said...

Sometimes things don't end well. You know that Christine. :)

Yolanda Renée said...

Hi Gary, no illusion, you were here! :)

Thanks Gary!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Joy!

Yolanda Renée said...

Who knows maybe she will. Hi Russell!

Yolanda Renée said...

Hey Maurice, you never know, maybe he should have kept his mouth shut. :)

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Shandra!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Yarnspinner!

Yolanda Renée said...

But I have to, only allowed 100 words! Thanks Ga H!

Yolanda Renée said...

Almost, maybe, not quite, don't know didn't finish it. LOL Hey Pat!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks ansumani, I hope it does, but I'm like a lot of the others, I want more too! LOL

Unknown said...

Yikes! The twist at the end was awesomely creepy! I'm loving what you do with these little 100 word stories. I used to do flash fic competitions with 300 word limits, but I can't image being limited to 100 and doing as well as you. Have a great weekend! :)

Debbie D. said...

This is a terrific, suspenseful snippet. Hard to do with such an austere word limit. Kudos!

Yolanda Renée said...

Could have used an extra 200 for sure. LOL Thanks Lexa!

Yolanda Renée said...

Hard is what makes it such a wonderful challenge. Thanks Debbie!

The Armchair Squid said...

Yikes! That was fun.

Denise Covey said...

Yolanda, your stories are chilling and thrilling as Edgar Allan Poe would say. You'll have no trouble writing for the Halloween WEP challenge. Great use of the picture. :-)

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields said...

Dear Yolanda,

Apparently he didn't kill her. I hope she can keep ahead of him.

Shalom,

Rochelle

Yolanda Renée said...

Not for her it wasn't. LOL Hey Squid, thanks for stopping by!

Yolanda Renée said...

I hope not Denise, knock on wood. Thanks for the confidence.

Yolanda Renée said...

I hope so too, but she's got to be quick and careful.

Thanks Rochelle, hope you are feeling better!

draliman said...

Great build-up of the illusion of safety in the darkness, only to be broken by the moonlight and that chilling laugh. Very good!

margirene said...

Very scary. Such an effort to escape, and at the last minute she's done for. Great twist.