Monday, August 10, 2015

HAUNTED

For this flash fiction challenge, Barbara W Beacham has provided a photo and the first sentence of a story. Your challenge is to finish the story using 100-150 words, not including the sentence provided. Don’t forget to use the opening sentence… This challenge runs from Monday to Sunday! Get creative and have fun finishing the story!

Our thanks, today, goes to J.A. over at Living Author Society for suggesting a topic for this week’s challenge.

Please include the photo with your bit of flash and a link back to this post. Do not forget to click on the blue frog and add your link so that others can enjoy your story too! Now have some fun!





HAUNTED
Where did they go?”

You ask as you snap your haunting pictures of ruination. I see vibrancy, families, children, and my love; he'd fought courageously, but was overwhelmed by the sheer numbers. Father had sent me to the caves to gather the healing herbs for my sick sister. The beasts attacked after I left, and I watched from the hill above as the horde destroyed what had been my home.

My people believed the abode was invincible, but they'd died horrifically. Brick by brick these monsters were relentless in their attack. Our simple weapons took out a good number of them, but the beasts had more powerful armaments of light and fire.

I heard the screams long after they went silent. Once the invaders had wiped my tribe from existence and moved on to the next settlement. I returned to prepare for the future. Vengeance will be mine.

Please come in, rest a while.

150 words
Yolanda Renee © 2015

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25 comments:

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Very creative! I wouldn't have come up with beasts attacking.

Pat Hatt said...

The invaders better watch their back

Sally said...
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Sally said...

I'm sure vengeance will be exacted - great story

cleemckenzie said...

Feel sorry for the character watching the destruction of her home.

cleemckenzie said...

Feel sorry for the character watching the destruction of her home.

Priceless Joy said...

Excellent story Yolanda! I loved it.

Chrys Fey said...

It always makes me sad when I think about all the Native Americans who were killed. This was a great (but sad) story about vengeance.

Graham Lawrence said...

Great slant on this story. A very interesting read. Thank You!

Robyn Campbell said...

Yolanda, that was fantastic! I loved reading it. That last sentence was awesome. Your use of beasts was so good. You rocked it.

Robyn Campbell said...

Yolanda, that was fantastic! I loved reading it. That last sentence was awesome. Your use of beasts was so good. You rocked it.

Yolanda Renée said...

Hi Alex, thanks, I tried to view the scene from her perspective.

Yolanda Renée said...

She's one determined lady, they better!

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Sally, in some way, yes.

Yolanda Renée said...

Me too, a horrible scene to witness.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Joy!

Yolanda Renée said...

Me too Chrys, but it doesn't end, does it? Will it ever?

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Graham, appreciate you stopping by.

Yolanda Renée said...

Thanks Robyn, appreciate the read and especially the comment. I have a tendency to go where the prompt takes me.

Tara Tyler said...

twisty scary goodness! nice job!

Anonymous said...

Revenge served ...

Christine Rains said...

Wonderfully written and chilling.

Unknown said...

This is a chilling tale! I wonder how he got his revenge.... Thanks for writing again for the MFtS challenge and be well... ^..^

draliman said...

Very dark. I hope she gets her revenge,
I like your description of the killers as "beasts" - they were in a way, with their "fire sticks" and thirst for invasion and murder.

Debbie D. said...

Those ruins certainly set the scene. Your tale of killer beasts and decimation is gripping, Yolanda.