Monday, August 31, 2015

CONSEQUENCES

It's Monday and time for a little fun. Thanks to Barbara W. Beacham and her weekly flash fiction challenge. Just 100 - 150 words, the photograph and the first sentence as your inspiration.
 "The cemetery spread along the area known as Devils Abode."



CONSEQUENCES

  “The cemetery spread along the area known as Devils Abode.”

Under a full moon on All Hallows Eve in the Devil's Abode, we vowed our eternal love.

His body strong, athletic, and golden brown like the sand at midday when the sun paints the earth with its most potent rays.

His voice was deep and reassuring, his kisses soft and alluring, so warm and electrifying, deep and demanding. Conquered by desire, I surrendered all to the man I loved.

How was I to know that Jimmy was the devil in disguise? Or that losing my virginity that night would raise the demons of hell? 

For God's sake, stop blaming me for the world's ills! I was only sixteen!

104 words
Yolanda Renee © 2015


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36 comments:

  1. Well, that's a first time to remember! :-)

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    1. Hi Annalisa, I don't think the world will let her. I figured Eve was blamed in the Bible, and since things seem to going to hell at light speed, why not a poor sixteen year old girl. The presidential nominees, the stock market, a do nothing congress, it has to be someones fault! :)

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  2. Damn, that is a first the world won't soon forget

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  3. Nice twist, especially with her humorous comment at the end!

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  4. I laughed out loud at the end! Great job. And thank you for reading my book. So glad you enjoyed it. :)

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    1. Loved your book, thanks Christine. I hoped folks would find it funny!

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  5. Losing your virginity to the devil? Yikes! The last sentences made me laugh, though.

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    1. Hi Chrys, I thought it was something that happened everyday.:)
      Glad you found it funny!

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  6. Great story Yolanda! The last line was perfect! Thanks for writing again for the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well... ^..^

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    1. Hi Barb, Hope you're feeling better. Thanks, love the challenge!

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  7. Haha.. that's one heck of a first time story! :)

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    1. Hi Madilyn, something tells me most of them are! :)

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  8. Great story! That happens only too often to young girls. You captured it well.

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    1. Hi Joy, so true, more often than not! Thanks!

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  9. I enjoyed your story! Yeah, we all make some questionable choices at sixteen. Fortunately, they don't always have such dire consequences.

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    1. Hi L. G., sixteen is so young, but I think it fits today. Those kind of choice are always fraught with consequences!

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  10. Excellent job! LOVED the ending. You rocked it, my friend. You teach through your FF. You, Denise and Michelle have taught me stuff and you don't even realize it. xoxo

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    1. Hi Robyn, Thanks, oh yes I do. I swear I learn something new everyday. Be open to it and it happens. Recognize it and you'll use it. That's what it's all about, this fabulous writing community!

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  11. Loved it. Poor girl. Funny twist, I smiled at the ending. But in a cemeterey for God's sake??

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    1. Hi Jo, I know creepy, but it went with the story, and now a days, kids are more fearless! Thanks!

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  12. That story was awesome! I loved it. I have trouble with flash fiction-telling a story in a short amount of words, so you have alot to teach me about technique.

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    1. Just dive in and write. Practice, practice, practice - that's what I've been doing. Weekly challenges make it possible and fun. Join us!

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  13. I have found that if you are pointing your finger at somebody then nobody looks at you. I think most of us probably sleep with the devil at least once.

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    1. Hi tnkerr, you're right, and yes we all do!

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  14. The young are easy prey. Well executed.

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    1. Hi yarnspinner, so true, a time you can ruin your entire life with one bad move!

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  15. Well, teenagers will make mistakes! That was a pretty big one, though.

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  16. Superb Yolanda. 'Stop blaming me for the world' ills.' Love it.

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  17. Plot twist, dun dun DUNNN. Cool story :)

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